Re: First Draft

[Guest guest]

cover letter looks great. Can't wait to see the main letter!

Apple

" tommy perkins " wrote:

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> Here is the first draft of my cover letter. I have purposely made it

short.

> Please have at it with your criticism and suggestions--grammar,

style or

> whatever. I'll post the main open letter tonight or tomorrow

sometime.

>

> Thanks,

>

> Tommy

>

[Guest guest]

At 10:40 06/12/99 -0800, you wrote:

>cover letter looks great. Can't wait to see the main letter!

>Apple

Yup. Looks like Tommy's earlier efforts weren't altogether wasted!

Joe B.

[Guest guest]

My suggestions precede your wording in brackets. I like action verbs -- hence

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>Here is the first draft of my cover letter. I have purposely made it short.

> Please have at it with your criticism and suggestions--grammar, style or

>whatever. I'll post the main open letter tonight or tomorrow sometime.

>

>Thanks,

>

>Tommy

>

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>

>Dear Editor:

>

>As a journalist you [undoubtedly know more than most about] (are undoubtedly

more knowledgable than most on) First

>Amendment principles. [That the government might dictate] (Certainly the

thought of government dictating) what

>you write, how you write, and where you write is anathema to your principles

>as a [journalist and a] free citizen of the United States.

>

>Also, as you know, the [Religion clauses of the First Amendment precede the

Press clause.] (Press clause of the First Amendment is preceded by

>the Religion clauses.) Imagine how [you would be insulted if]

(unconstitutional, indeed insulting, it

>would be for) government [unconstitutionally] (to) dictate[d] how and where you

pray, or (to) prescribe[d]

>in detail your relationship with God. [And yet] (Did you know that) the

government does

>

((and has been for years)) precisely this, [and has done so for years].

>

>On November 14, 1999 the U.S. Supreme Court refused to overturn, thus

>allowed to stand, a ruling by the U.S. Court of Appeals for the Second

>Circuit ordering this violation to cease. The Supreme Court of the State of

>Tennessee made the same ruling in 1997.

>

>Yet throughout the United States the federal and state governments continue

>to violate this cherished freedom of the people to worship God according to

>the dictates of their own consciences. The U.S. Military [offends especially

in] (is an especially

>egregious offender on) this matter.

>

>I am sending the enclosed open letter to the members of the Armed Forces of

>the United States, to you and every worldwide major newspaper serving a

>significant U.S. Military population, and humbly request that you publish

>it, in hopes [we may reclaim] (of reclaiming) religious liberty for all

citizens of our

>country.

>

>Please allow me to leave you with the following quote:

>

> " Experience should teach us to be most on our guard to protect liberty when

>the government's purposes are beneficial. The

>greatest dangers to liberty lurk in insidious encroachment by men of zeal,

>well meaning but without understanding. "

>

>U.S. Supreme Court Justice, Louis D. Brandeis

>

>Respectfully,

>

>Tommy Perkins

>

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