Guest guest Posted January 27, 2005 Report Share Posted January 27, 2005 Tess - Just wanted to check my definitions. An onda mel is a two stanza eight line (total) love poem. The " one " I shared last night is really three onda mels. There is a syllable pattern and a rhyme pattern. The syllable pattern is the same for both stanzas- the rhyme pattern is a little different. The first and last line of each stanza are eight syllables apiece and the third and fourth lines - four syllables. The rhyme scheme is abba cddc. If I were to diagram it would like this: 8A(night) 4B (tones) 4B (alone) 8A (tight) 8C (memory) 4D (flannel) 4D (tell) 8C (me) I hope that makes sense- sort of takes the romance out of it - like school- doesn't it? I flipped the first and last lines of the poems around as a style choice- not part of the form. I tried to pull the poems together in the phrasing in the first line of the second stanza of each( lullaby of memory, canticle of mystery, parallels of reverie). Sorry- I think my job has taught me to make the obvious obscure and the obscure obvious. Just thought if you ever get bored -lol- you or others might want to try. I like the challenge and it is satisfying when done. Thanks again, Tess! Hugs, [ ] ~ Poems- Sharing > >Dear ..that is so beautiful! I'd love to learn more about that >style of poetry. > >I hope you continue to share. > >Hugs... > >Tess > > > > > Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest guest Posted January 27, 2005 Report Share Posted January 27, 2005 Tess - Just wanted to check my definitions. An onda mel is a two stanza eight line (total) love poem. The " one " I shared last night is really three onda mels. There is a syllable pattern and a rhyme pattern. The syllable pattern is the same for both stanzas- the rhyme pattern is a little different. The first and last line of each stanza are eight syllables apiece and the third and fourth lines - four syllables. The rhyme scheme is abba cddc. If I were to diagram it would like this: 8A(night) 4B (tones) 4B (alone) 8A (tight) 8C (memory) 4D (flannel) 4D (tell) 8C (me) I hope that makes sense- sort of takes the romance out of it - like school- doesn't it? I flipped the first and last lines of the poems around as a style choice- not part of the form. I tried to pull the poems together in the phrasing in the first line of the second stanza of each( lullaby of memory, canticle of mystery, parallels of reverie). Sorry- I think my job has taught me to make the obvious obscure and the obscure obvious. Just thought if you ever get bored -lol- you or others might want to try. I like the challenge and it is satisfying when done. Thanks again, Tess! Hugs, [ ] ~ Poems- Sharing > >Dear ..that is so beautiful! I'd love to learn more about that >style of poetry. > >I hope you continue to share. > >Hugs... > >Tess > > > > > Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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